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Tainting Alice ... in Randland

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Copy the paragraph into the next comment and change one word. A word may need to be replaced by two words (or several words may have to change together). Make every version meaningful. (SPAM IS WELCOME) If someone ahead of you has made a change that you think requires another word to change, then change it. Oh: To make it more of a game, if you get bored, you’re definitely allowed to play with the text.

Lewis Caroll: Through The Looking Glass. Chapter IX. Queen Alice.

“WELL, this is grand!” said Alice. “I never expected I should be a Queen so soon—and I’ll tell you what it is, your Majesty,” she went on, in a severe tone (she was always rather fond of scolding herself), “it’ll never do for you to be lolling about in the grass like that! Queens have to be dignified, you know!”

1. “WELL, this has been grand!” said Alice. “I never expected I should be a Queen so soon—and I’ll tell you what it is, your Majesty,” she went on, in a severe tone (she was always rather fond of scolding herself), “it’ll never do for you to be lolling about in the grass like that! Queens have to be dignified, you know!”

ummmmm I hope I'm doing this right...

 

1. “WELL, this has been grand!” said Alice. “I never expected I should be a Queen so soon—and I’ll tell you what it is, your Majesty,” she went on, in a severe tone (she was always rather fond of scolding herself), “it’ll never do for you to be LOLing about in the grass like that! Queens have to be dignified, you know!”

3. “WELL, this has been grand!” said Alice. “I never expected I should be a Queen so soon—and I’ll tell you what it is, your Majesty,” she went on, in a severe tone (she was always rather fond of arguing with herself), “it’ll never do for you to be LOLing about in the grass like that! Queens have to be dignified, you know!”

 

(should we be numbering the versions? :assumptions:)

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